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新出炉的雅思高分例文(科技影响类),3月1日的考生好看起来了!

作者:俞鑫 | 来源:沪江博客 | 时间:2008-02-25 | 1671 次 | 字体 [    ]   [收藏]  [划词   ]  

3月1日考试的同学,还有一个week的复习时间,下面又是一篇值得借鉴的雅思例文,由于篇幅过长(直接故意),大家考试的时候只要借鉴它的结构、措辞和句型就好,千万不要写那么长阿!!!

Many employees may work at home with modern technology. Some people claim that it benefits only workers, but not employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Due to enormous advances in modern technology and deteriorating traffic conditions, especially in metropolitan cities --- New York, Shanghai, etc., the way in which the employees go to work has been dramatically altered. One of the suggested effective ways is to work at home. Basically, I believe working at home not only helps reduce the employees’ cost of transport but also improves their work efficiency, benefiting their boss in the meantime.(71 words)

The fact that the persistent traffic congestion, in particular one in the morning, often results in a long period of time wasted on the way to work and, if you are unlucky enough, lateness for work may justify the employees’ option for working at home. It is known that varying sources of stress have created serious sleeping problems --- for instance, insomnia. Therefore, many young employees who are burdened with work because most of them are eager to climb the ladder of success within the shortest time find it really hard to get up so early in the morning, full of energy. Allowing the employees to work at home, nonetheless, can make their schedule more flexible, which means they stand a chance of enjoying a better morning sleep for refreshment.(130 words)

In addition, the bane of unsatisfactory work performance of the employees, it is claimed, may be attributed mainly to their limited time and energy, part of which to make matter worse are squandered on the way to work and back home. In consequence, the easiest way for the boss to improve his employees’ performance is to allow them to finish their work at home by saving the valuable time and precious energy wasted. Thereby, the employees may give themselves more willingly over to their work.(85words)

Yet there is one potential drawback with working at home --- insufficient supervision. It cannot be guaranteed that every employee will work to his maximum capacity, especially when he works at home. The boss, under such circumstances, find it almost impossible to supervise the process of his employees’ work and this may incur skepticism. (54words)

Overall, working at home is undoubtedly beneficial to most employees and meanwhile it should not be overlooked that the boss also profits a lot from it. (26words)

说明:由于第二段写的实在太长了,为了控制篇幅,后几段明显就有点草草收尾的感觉了,不过语句和措辞还是不错的,呵呵。。。

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